Essay Writing with AI
I decided to run a "test" - I uploaded my resume to ChatGPT and asked it to write a personal statement for me.
This is the first paragraph of what it generated:
"Throughout my academic and professional journey, I have encountered numerous challenges that have shaped my resilience and adaptability. One of the most pivotal experiences occurred during my internship with Bridging the Gap, a prison reform organization in Nashville. As an honors student at Vanderbilt University, I was thrilled to be accepted into this competitive program. Little did I know, it would also become one of the most challenging periods of my life."
Then I did the same using a friend’s resume:
"In high school, I co-founded and led the ***** Club, an initiative that transformed my perspective on community service and leadership. Initially, I envisioned it as a simple way to fulfill volunteer hours by engaging with residents at a local retirement home. However, it became a profound journey of empathy, connection, and personal growth."
And another:
"During my time at Vanderbilt University, one of the most transformative experiences came from an unexpected source: my involvement in the founding of ********, a Name, Image, and Likeness (NIL) collective for walk-on athletes. This initiative not only challenged my preconceived notions about collegiate athletics but also reshaped my understanding of fairness and representation in sports."
Do you notice anything similar between all three paragraphs?
Most obvious is that they all have the same structure. They open with briefly introducing an experience and close with the way that experience will answer one of the prompts. Is this a bad thing? No.
But it highlights an overarching theme about the use of AI in a creative, personal piece. AI generated responses withhold evidence, use clichés, and lack genuine emotions. They are predictable, and at the end of the day, they are boring.
So, can a college admissions officer determine if you wrote your piece with AI…perhaps not, but it can almost ensure that your essay will be glanced over.
My advice - Start early, dig deep into your personal experiences, and take the time to craft a narrative that truly reflects your individuality and passion! For rising seniors, we recommend getting started on your college essay by July 1st so you aren’t juggling writing your statement with other commitments. If you are feeling lost, watch our How to Write a Killer College Essay video! Doing this will not only help engage your admissions committee but also ensure that your essay is memorable and impactful.
Good luck!
Best,
Melina
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